darkling Posted November 29, 2006 Share Posted November 29, 2006 Ok, here's one I found that I wrote awhile ago... I'm sorry that everything I write takes on a slightly darker tone, it's just who I am I guess I write what I feel. Forever friends, a heart of stone, love not spoken, left alone. Times we shared, present to past, love not spoken, pain to last. You understood, my heart laid bare, spoken aloud, a silent stare. Pain of mine, my bleeding heart, I spoke the truth, love won't part. I wear this pain, so you are free, dark inside, they eat at me. Hate for life, my love defends, you're never alone, forever friends. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HurleyBabe6917 Posted November 29, 2006 Share Posted November 29, 2006 wow. that's awesome. i love it very much. good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dil Posted November 29, 2006 Share Posted November 29, 2006 not bad, you may want to fix this small grammatical error in this stanza: Hate for life, my love defends, your never alone, forever friends. it's you're not your Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darkling Posted November 29, 2006 Author Share Posted November 29, 2006 LOL dil, thnx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
InsomianicMind Posted November 29, 2006 Share Posted November 29, 2006 That is wonderful, Great Job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted November 29, 2006 Share Posted November 29, 2006 That was such a great poem, i really enjoyed it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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