dil Posted November 29, 2006 Share Posted November 29, 2006 Disappointment (One Big) Never was smart enough. Never was pretty enough. Never was witty enough. So what can I do? How can I please you? Can it be inferred? Explain your standard. It’s all true. What should I do? How should I think? When should I blink? You are perfection. I’m a constant correction. Correct Me. Brutally. I’m on my hands and knees. I’m waiting for the fall. End of it all. Disappointment (One Big) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Law Posted November 29, 2006 Share Posted November 29, 2006 No worries, everyone has to earn what they receive in life, and if you believe,love and support yourself you can do just the same. Nice poem by the way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dil Posted November 29, 2006 Author Share Posted November 29, 2006 it's horribly cliched, the only thing that's decent about it is the flow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dil Posted November 29, 2006 Author Share Posted November 29, 2006 I'll post something later that's decent, when I'm not feeling so self-pitying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dil Posted November 29, 2006 Author Share Posted November 29, 2006 thank you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted November 29, 2006 Share Posted November 29, 2006 No matter what you say i like this one heaps I think its very well written and i could relate to it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chai28jm Posted November 30, 2006 Share Posted November 30, 2006 i like it,, because it orginal.. maybe why you dont like it because you feel it didnt explain yourself good enough.. but it did more than you think.. by the way dont be nervous arround people .. be you ,,.just love you and you be perfect.. plus i think you are cutie (smile) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted November 30, 2006 Share Posted November 30, 2006 Cliched like you said in my eyes. Poems like these help compile thoughts. But I did like the flow, so I'm curious to see some of your other stuff. I, like you, am very critical when it comes to reading/viewing art. -ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dil Posted November 30, 2006 Author Share Posted November 30, 2006 well, there's the rain and teardrops one also in this poetry forum. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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