Siraf Posted November 24, 2006 Share Posted November 24, 2006 Take me away, need to go somewhere Take me away, take me someplace else Take me far away, I have to go Take me away, Please don't say no Facing the wall, does it talk to me Wanting to fall, when nobody sees My eyes are dry, looking through glass No need to cry, life speeds too fase Stare out the window, gaze at the stars Make a wish on the moon, or travel to mars It's all in you mind, to take you away Look all around you, it's just another day ---- CHORUS Take me away, show me a place to fly Take me away, or grant my wish and let me die Take me away, and show me where you lie Take me away, so I can learn to cry ---- Sleeping at night, dreaming a song Have I closed my eyes, did it last all night long? I'm somewhere else, I don't want to leave I'll give up my past, forsaking my grief Show me you eyes, so I'll say goodbye I think that you know, why I can't say "why" Let me pass through, now it is time Time for this light to stop it's false shine [CHORUS] Moments have gone, don't be afraid I ask myself, why am I friends with hate I'll turn back time, all in my mind Don't show me mercy, I'm already blind Take me far away to a place with no humanity Take me to a place where I feel I don't need to be free Let me hold onto your wings, until the end of days I don't care where I land, as long as I am far away LAST CHORUS Take me away, show me a place to fly Take me away, or grant my wish and let me die Take me away, and show me where you lie Take me away, so I can learn to cry So I can leave my past behind.. And my coiled up life can now unwind... If it sucks then it sucks, but I just wrote this on impulse when I felt really emotional. Hope it's not THAT bad =) 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TxRedheadGuy Posted November 24, 2006 Share Posted November 24, 2006 Very good Keep up the good work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted November 24, 2006 Share Posted November 24, 2006 Thats really good... have you got any music for it? Those lyrics are really good! Keep writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Siraf Posted November 25, 2006 Author Share Posted November 25, 2006 Thanks =) by the way the line "No need to cry, life speeds too fase" is actually "...life speeds too fast" it would be great to put that into music...I have this tune in my head that needs to get out! lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted November 26, 2006 Share Posted November 26, 2006 Yeah, you should I wanna hear the final copy lol! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blueangel Posted November 28, 2006 Share Posted November 28, 2006 The wall: "Watcha talking to me for?! I'm just sitting here minding my own business and before I know it, you start singing to me! What's up with that? Has the world gone craaazzzy???" hehe I'm weird Pretty decent song I must say LATER: you know what? I just read that again. It flows amazingly well and is actually quite clever, even if sorrowful. I took a lot out of it. Here's my favorite part: "Sleeping at night, dreaming a song Have I closed my eyes, did it last all night long? I'm somewhere else, I don't want to leave I'll give up my past, forsaking my grief Show me you eyes, so I'll say goodbye I think that you know, why I can't say "why" How amazing is that rhyme scheme and just the words you say? It's almost... perfect. I can imagine this being a song and doing really well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Siraf Posted December 19, 2006 Author Share Posted December 19, 2006 Wow thanks BlueAngel ^^ That's weird..I didn't see any replies or anything on my account.. slaps account Anyhoo, thanks for the comments everyone! I have this really nice poem (I think it's nice anyway heheh) which I wrote when I was someplace else! I'll post it here soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
whenamansloveisreal Posted December 19, 2006 Share Posted December 19, 2006 i really liked it as well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Siraf Posted May 21, 2008 Author Share Posted May 21, 2008 Thanks whenamansloveisreal Even though I read your coment almost 2 years later sorry! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blueangel Posted May 22, 2008 Share Posted May 22, 2008 Thanks whenamansloveisreal Even though I read your coment almost 2 years later sorry! Lol HI SIRAF! I was quite strange two years ago!! haha not much has changed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Siraf Posted May 22, 2008 Author Share Posted May 22, 2008 lol yup, some things never change *winks* lol. btw, I wrote a poem (after a looong time!) find it and tell me what you think, k? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
karma85 Posted May 30, 2008 Share Posted May 30, 2008 Oh You Write Lyrics 2 ?.... So Do I !!!! I Liked It I Felt What U Was Sayin And Felt What U Was Feelin....luved It.... Read My Poem!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Siraf Posted June 7, 2008 Author Share Posted June 7, 2008 Thanks Karma85! Yeah your poems are really awesome too! Looks like you got the gift Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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