Boughtandpaidfor Posted November 5, 2006 Share Posted November 5, 2006 Wow I thought I was cool last night I felt like I had all the cards I was playing everything, smiling at all. Everyone smiled back last night Everyone was friendly They didn't know how much I hated them. I don't think I've ever felt that arrogant I tried to use and abuse everyone I flirted outrageously and demanded what wasn't mine. Something so dark and hidden, comes out Unexpectedly and grabs hold of my soul Is how I like to describe the way I was last night. But that hasn't been true, because it was me This is the facade, this is the shadow I'm pretending every day and it makes me sad. I had a week of love last week, I found A new way and I followed it I want to be loving to everybody (despite last night). The twisting turning cold fire in my stomach Is what reminds me of a dangerous cancer Rotting through my system and threatening me. I'm at a fork in the road and I thought I had decided To be loving and renewed and trusting But I can't ignore the natural and effortless bile which consumed me last night. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted November 5, 2006 Share Posted November 5, 2006 Cool, I like it!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boughtandpaidfor Posted November 5, 2006 Author Share Posted November 5, 2006 Thankgod for Ailec1987- almost 24hours with no reply and the ego was smarting......... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted November 5, 2006 Share Posted November 5, 2006 HAHAHAHAHA I hear ya. Ailec is always here. I really like the concept behind it, really reminds me of how I can be sometimes. I'd really like to see some different variations of this idea in different poetic formats... i think you could really create something powerful. -ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted November 5, 2006 Share Posted November 5, 2006 Thankgod for Ailec1987- almost 24hours with no reply and the ego was smarting.........LMAO i can so relate! one time she was the ONLY person who commented on a poem i posted. of course, she liked it. this is a good 'stream of consciousness' one, too, although i'm not sure that i agree with your conclusion that your darker side is more genuine than your lighter side. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
doyathink Posted November 5, 2006 Share Posted November 5, 2006 Hey, this is very interesting. I liked it.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boughtandpaidfor Posted November 6, 2006 Author Share Posted November 6, 2006 this is a good 'stream of consciousness' one, too, although i'm not sure that i agree with your conclusion that your darker side is more genuine than your lighter side. I just meant that when anger came out it was more true than the way I act the rest of the time- like I was bottling it up and it was making me bitter and cynical and arrogant. Maybe it felt more permanent while I was writing it. This one was just venting maybe anyway- but always helps Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted November 6, 2006 Share Posted November 6, 2006 Comments always make you feel better. Great job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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