DeviantOne Posted October 8, 2006 Share Posted October 8, 2006 Harsh words and violent blows Hidden secrets nobody knows She is lonely Even though you can't tell She is reaching out For what, she doesn't know She will continue to sit in silence And hope that someone may stumble accross Her and all of her emptiness But they only hope that they do it in time Otherwise she will have drifted too far And she may let go Of whatever grasp of the world she has As she slowly fades out of the lives of everyone Nearly unnoticed.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Serendipity1607307077 Posted October 8, 2006 Share Posted October 8, 2006 Wow... I love it... so sad though... Where in Australia are you by the way? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadows Light Posted October 8, 2006 Share Posted October 8, 2006 Sad story...yes. But you can see it on the faces of some who are on that dark journey. Its like the life has gone out of thier eyes. I know a woman who can't smile. She's in her 50's.. and now has grandchildren. Her smiles don't reach her eyes. Her laughs have a ring of.... hollowness to it. When you talk to her of life... she see's darkness, bitterness, and all the bad in the world very clearly. I wonder if even the the flowers have lost thier color for her. If she see's the world in the beautiful color she once used to as a young woman. The look in her eyes is blank... its as if she's waiting for that final blow of some tragic accident or disease to take her away. Hope lost. So sad. Yes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted October 8, 2006 Share Posted October 8, 2006 Great work its touching and sad but it gets accross your point Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ms. Babydoll Posted October 9, 2006 Share Posted October 9, 2006 I really like it, it has something so moving about it, I'd love to hear more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted October 9, 2006 Share Posted October 9, 2006 there's something undefinable in both the rhythm and the sentiment of this poem... i can't put my finger on it... but it absolutely gets my attention. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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