AnotherBrokenDoll Posted September 16, 2006 Share Posted September 16, 2006 Dear God, You say you are my father, You say you are my mother, I cry out to you at night. My heart is bleeding, My life you are no longer feeding, My soul has left my side. Hidden behind these lies, Wanting you to hear my cries, Wishing for my tears to end. With my nails painted black, With my hair tied back. Crying until sun breaks. You said you were love, You said you were always above, Well where are you when i need you? God now i see, You were right beside me, I was just blinded by night. Hold me tight, Let me dream tonight, Sweet good dreams of warm summer nights. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sumguy Posted September 16, 2006 Share Posted September 16, 2006 That was a really good poem, Rozi, I enjoyed it =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted September 16, 2006 Author Share Posted September 16, 2006 Thanks... I didn't really like that one but thanks anyway. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HellFrost666 Posted September 16, 2006 Share Posted September 16, 2006 It was good until the end, lol... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted September 16, 2006 Author Share Posted September 16, 2006 lolz, yeah i thought some people wouldn't like it cuz of that. Sorry thats just my beilief Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NKP Posted September 16, 2006 Share Posted September 16, 2006 Hey no thats real good i love it so Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted September 16, 2006 Author Share Posted September 16, 2006 Thanks kita Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
doyathink Posted September 18, 2006 Share Posted September 18, 2006 That is one of the best I've read so far! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted September 18, 2006 Author Share Posted September 18, 2006 wow thanks... Its weird cuz in my opinion thats the worst one i have written. But im glad other people like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
doyathink Posted September 18, 2006 Share Posted September 18, 2006 It shows a lot of emotion and thought,and maybe I can just relate to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moon Goddess Posted September 22, 2006 Share Posted September 22, 2006 I like it. It's very nice I can relate to it. Sometimes I',m blind to see the same thing I'm glad you didn't give up on God. Very Nice poem even if you don't think so. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted September 23, 2006 Author Share Posted September 23, 2006 Thanks MG, i guess its always good when people can relate to your poems and get something out of them! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spugly Fuglet Posted September 23, 2006 Share Posted September 23, 2006 I like it has lots of feeling Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted September 23, 2006 Author Share Posted September 23, 2006 Thanks i always try to put feeling in stuff poetry isn't good without it in my opinion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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