Fisch Posted August 22, 2006 Share Posted August 22, 2006 I was betrayed in the summertime and this poem is one of many that came from it: Is it pain that we all wanted on those sweet summer days when glory was an afterthought to passion? When we forgot ourselves underneath the shade of willows avoiding the sun weary and slow to think the breeze cooling beneath loose garments and the only discomfort is the hot breath of a lover on your neck Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steven1607307306 Posted August 22, 2006 Share Posted August 22, 2006 Very nice, I like the fact that the poem ,as a whole, is sort of an oxymoron. Talking about sweet summer days, however still the message of being hurt in some way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted August 22, 2006 Share Posted August 22, 2006 Wow, that's so sweet, keep writing more!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fisch Posted August 22, 2006 Author Share Posted August 22, 2006 Steven interpereted it in the way I did as well. I wanted for the poem to convey how I saw my ex after she cheated and left me. Thanks for the feedback. Ailec is right though, the ending is sweet. I am sure she is having a nice time, guiltless in her actions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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