neva_black_n_white Posted August 19, 2006 Share Posted August 19, 2006 dont look at me with those eyes that share years of deciept dont try to get close to me a broken hearts on reciept dont try to touch my leg implying it'll all be ok dont wipe away these tears get out, dont stay! dont speak with that tone saying youll miss me dont act like the perfect man "AGGGGHH!" just leave! dont crave in your head to be so blunt you want this love back, but ill soon be on refund Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dyxy Posted August 20, 2006 Share Posted August 20, 2006 hm. I like, I like. Keep writing. You have real talent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted August 20, 2006 Share Posted August 20, 2006 Yea, that's a great poem. Was this dedicated to someone by the way or is in just written in general? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ms. Babydoll Posted August 20, 2006 Share Posted August 20, 2006 I like it, it's very original, well done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted August 21, 2006 Author Share Posted August 21, 2006 hey, thanks guys. yeah. there is a certain person to this poem. its my ex. its minorly symbolic of my confusion to what to do. i feel like im stuck in lymbo and scared to decide whether to go back to the relationship. i dont know. its hard. hes amazing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steven1607307306 Posted August 22, 2006 Share Posted August 22, 2006 I think it's a great poem. It DOES capture your feeling on confusion, which is very essential to this type of poem. I think it's pretty good though, keep writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted August 26, 2006 Author Share Posted August 26, 2006 thanks steven.. muchly appreciated.. and the confusion continues! neva Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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