Gecko Posted August 15, 2006 Share Posted August 15, 2006 This is my first poem, let me know how you like it... Goddess Frozen in time Like a living statue Standing in front of the rose-red curtain Reflected by her eyes Secrets of distant memories, Somehow cleansed in the waters Of time and resolve Gentle warmness emanates from her curves From her inviting gaze Love and understanding... Affection for the struggles With demons she posessed herself Long ago... Her smile gently turns to a laugh, Animated by the spirits of innocence, Your heart is bathed In comfort and amenity She bends over now Sporting the energy of Venus The shape of her body transforms gracefully Hair swings accross the side of her face You can smell her essense Feel her presense She takes your hand You are lifted to a height She embraces you In a moment of enchantment Ecstasy fills every cell in your body Running through every vein Relaxing every muscle Filling your very being... You are one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted August 16, 2006 Share Posted August 16, 2006 Thta's an incredible poem. It kinda does remind me of a time machine by the first sentence "Frozen in time". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ms. Babydoll Posted August 18, 2006 Share Posted August 18, 2006 For your first poem that is some what amazing! I really enjoyed reading it, it has so much detail in it, well done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spugly Fuglet Posted August 18, 2006 Share Posted August 18, 2006 yes very good I like the imagry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gecko Posted August 23, 2006 Author Share Posted August 23, 2006 Thanks for the input. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadows Light Posted August 23, 2006 Share Posted August 23, 2006 Thank-you... that was very nice. Grin. There's a new moon out there tonight... I'll be sure to remember your poem as I bathe in the still moon-light. Many bright blessings to you. Keep writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steven1607307306 Posted August 23, 2006 Share Posted August 23, 2006 Wow, quite amazing. I thought is was a wonderful show of emotion. I can't wait to see your second poem...I'm sure it will be even BETTER. If that's possible... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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