dpressedone89 Posted July 12, 2006 Share Posted July 12, 2006 the sun sets rise up the night sky little girls shed tear and broken hearts cry out lullabys pray to the sky for answers none in clear sight ever show while your god suggests that im a cancer a plague from the land down below my eyes rest as pain takes my face nothing real is unbreakable just tragic heroes lost in space my heart weeps for the joy we never knew but thank to the sky the angels but my eyes fall on you, through the stories of our lives not a thing can comprehend the pain of the wives living under grace of sin true some things ive never known but aloneis all we are until together our souls grow Marry me on my falling star -stitcheS I am aware this is aweful but be kind please, oppinions and comments are needed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted July 12, 2006 Share Posted July 12, 2006 It's a lovely poem, you might want to keep writing more poems!!!!!!!!!!!! Clever choice of words!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dpressedone89 Posted July 12, 2006 Author Share Posted July 12, 2006 It's a lovely poem, you might want to keep writing more poems!!!!!!!!!!!! Clever choice of words!!!!!! will do, its the only thing im good at lol i think i have 100+ poems on here now lol -stitches nope only 60 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
arwen Posted July 12, 2006 Share Posted July 12, 2006 I think you have a genuine talent for this, dpressedone. I know you feel bad a great deal of the time. I think you are very mature for your age, your poem shows insight and deep emotions. Keep on writing them here! Maybe consider putting them together in a booklet? Ilse Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spugly Fuglet Posted July 12, 2006 Share Posted July 12, 2006 I like this line a lot just tragic heroes lost in space as a ring to it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PRSOV Posted July 12, 2006 Share Posted July 12, 2006 A well thought out poem, super... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Vacancy Posted July 13, 2006 Share Posted July 13, 2006 I actually think it is a great poem. Alot of good words. Well done. It clearly has raw emotions, very good work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nottoogreen Posted July 13, 2006 Share Posted July 13, 2006 "my heart weeps for the joy we never knew" and looks forward to the joy which is yet to come... Thank you for writing and please keep writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted July 13, 2006 Share Posted July 13, 2006 In referring to your other post, good thing you don't wanna end it anymore and instead use poetry as your great talent, keep on with it!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted July 13, 2006 Share Posted July 13, 2006 nothing real is unbreakable ow, the truth DOES hurt... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted July 13, 2006 Share Posted July 13, 2006 Yes, the truth does hurt but a lie hurts even more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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