NKP Posted July 9, 2006 Share Posted July 9, 2006 Have you ever felt so alone but so many people around have you ever loved someone who didnt love you have you felt so free, so happy then woke up it was just a dream have you lost someone close and didnt get a chance to say goodbye have you even been so hurt that the only answer is to let go have you ever locked yourself in your room just so you can slowly die i have, but who cares right Now your gone you killed yourself did you care about me im lost and confused and no longer want to go on cut me cut me deep rip out me heart then all my insides i dont got a choice i must end this pain i grabed the rope just like you daddy tied it around my neck now im just hanging here hanging there dead just like you daddy I know these suck but i just posted them here anyway Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CynicalGuitarist Posted July 9, 2006 Share Posted July 9, 2006 art and poetry doesn't suck, at long as it isn't coming from me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted July 9, 2006 Share Posted July 9, 2006 Clever poem!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PRSOV Posted July 9, 2006 Share Posted July 9, 2006 I really like the first one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted July 9, 2006 Share Posted July 9, 2006 you are really in touch with your pain. the ones who aren't, they worry me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boughtandpaidfor Posted July 10, 2006 Share Posted July 10, 2006 Have you noticed how standard replies in the poems forum are all one-liners? I wonder what the reason for that is? Maybe we don't want to criticise, maybe this is just a pitstop between threads. Maybe all these poems are just for ourselves and there isn't much anyone can say. Anyway... I liked your poem and I've felt all those things too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NKP Posted July 10, 2006 Author Share Posted July 10, 2006 Have you noticed how standard replies in the poems forum are all one-liners? I wonder what the reason for that is? Maybe we don't want to criticise, maybe this is just a pitstop between threads. Maybe all these poems are just for ourselves and there isn't much anyone can say. Anyway... I liked your poem and I've felt all those things too So true it is only one line, well thank you everyone for taking the time to read them and thanks Happytown, slightybent, PRSOV, Ailec1987 and cynicalGuitarist for your replys Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AwdreeHpburn Posted July 10, 2006 Share Posted July 10, 2006 Kita - i agree with who said you're in touch with your pain. Your poetry is touching and profound. I like it because I can relate in part but also because I can sympathise. You write well and use your words well, I feel like I understand how you're feeling. I'm sorry for your loss. I hope you'll keep expressing your thoughts and feelings through the art of writing.... Thanks for sharing. -T Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NKP Posted July 11, 2006 Author Share Posted July 11, 2006 Ta ree Saw thank you i never knew anyone would like them Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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