Daddy Bear Posted July 5, 2006 Share Posted July 5, 2006 Timmy he's now a grown man, mama don't stand out in the rain he will not be returning soon there's nothing to be gained. our job to guide him finished the apron strings must fall we taught him love and tenderness in truth, those things are all. the world is now before him long races to be run he makes his way as we once did Godspeed to him, our son. the folding knife he left me is pressing on my side a sudden wrenching grips my soul that cannot be denied. your tears are masked with raindrops such tears--the bird has flown stay there; i need to join you now that i may hide my own. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FoxLocke Posted July 5, 2006 Share Posted July 5, 2006 That is beautiful. I particularly loved the rhyme scheme. Great job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SapphireStar Posted July 5, 2006 Share Posted July 5, 2006 I agree. Very good job, Slightlybent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Casket Posted July 5, 2006 Share Posted July 5, 2006 Damm that was superb!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheRedQueen Posted July 5, 2006 Share Posted July 5, 2006 I did not connect to this poem. It's good enough but you are capable of producing better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted July 5, 2006 Author Share Posted July 5, 2006 thanks for the comments everybody. much appreciated. I did not connect to this poem. It's good enough but you are capable of producing better. probably true. tell it like it is TRQ. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted July 6, 2006 Share Posted July 6, 2006 Very nice poem!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
coollady1957 Posted July 6, 2006 Share Posted July 6, 2006 I guess I missed this today while I was gone. SB, this is a great poem. I could relate completely being the mother of a son and daughter that are on their own now. I actually like this one better than your most recent one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted July 6, 2006 Author Share Posted July 6, 2006 thanks CL. i did think about your son as the poem took shape. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AwdreeHpburn Posted July 6, 2006 Share Posted July 6, 2006 I (wipes tears) hope my son (sniff, sniff) never grows up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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