Daddy Bear Posted June 24, 2006 Share Posted June 24, 2006 bitter cold the darkness and sun brings only heat a burned or frozen Hobson's choice for every slab of meat migratory fevered but these two wretches know the railroads lead to nowhere safe the trains all run too slow still the meat it twitches a central nervous wreck with tears imprisoned in our eyes we voice what we suspect no road on this planet will lead to Heaven's gate we wish Charades was over now but nothingness will wait find a patch of twilight we'll dig a six-foot pit grace it with two marker stones and fill it with our **** not a Norman Rockwell but our way to survive to desecrate the open wound will keep us half-alive blended foe and lover i am that which you need extend to me your filthy hands and wipe them on my sleeve Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheRedQueen Posted June 25, 2006 Share Posted June 25, 2006 I'm not lying, your poem just made me wet, it's that good. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted June 25, 2006 Share Posted June 25, 2006 That was sweet!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HellFrost666 Posted June 29, 2007 Share Posted June 29, 2007 Very good SB... That would make good song lyrics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ttom Red Posted July 3, 2007 Share Posted July 3, 2007 I'm not lying, your poem just made me wet, it's that good. This poem makes ME wet too, and I'm a guy! It's that good!! hah, kidding of course, but in all seriousness this is a really good poem, I like it a lot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
comfyshoes Posted July 3, 2007 Share Posted July 3, 2007 Yep. I have to C**k up My Beaver to that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Muzatsu Posted July 6, 2007 Share Posted July 6, 2007 your imagery is very nitty gritty and violent. It's a rip your heart out kind of piece. Very nice, like bitter wine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted July 6, 2007 Author Share Posted July 6, 2007 Thanks for the positive reviews. Although it isn't perfect, this is one of my personal favorites among the three dozen or so poems I've posted on this site. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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