The_Vacancy Posted June 23, 2006 Share Posted June 23, 2006 This one I just whipped up. What is differant from this was I didn't get any prior ideas - I just started writing. Which means it can have a couple of differant meanings. I didn't try and make a smart intelligent poem with good words, cool rhimes and meanings - I just wrote. My idea of this is I picture this as just a young girl maybe seven or so who has so little to care about, she's just an insignificant little kid. Considering the fact we have terrorism and racism and all of these bad things that shape our world, she's just a small kid making ends meet. Proof of this is she has left her dreams and troubles behind to just buy a ham sandwhich and a two buck lemonade. It's a big world for a small kid. ***** She has her secrets They're pretty dangerous things She's got her tantrums Her anger Her midnight meetings Those shoes, that hair That tangled hair Her lipstick, the eyeliner Those nightmares A coffee shop to live by Her lemonade-stand to hire Scribble-me notepads And dreams on fire Pitch black mascara Whispers and voices An evening picnic in the park So many choices A big world, the small kid With fewer worries in mind World in her hands She's left her dreams behind For a ham sandwhich and - - And a two buck lemonade ***** Comments? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
brando Posted June 23, 2006 Share Posted June 23, 2006 Good poem. You have some nice little gems in their. She has her secrets They're pretty dangerous things Those shoes, that hair That tangled hair Her lemonade-stand to hire Scribble-me notepads I think sometimes the less you focus on the words and the point of what a poem will be, the more naturally it flows. just a note.. don't explain any of your poems... it is all up to the reader to interpert. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Vacancy Posted June 24, 2006 Author Share Posted June 24, 2006 Thanks for your opinions. Appreciate it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted June 25, 2006 Share Posted June 25, 2006 Very creative poem!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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