melrich Posted June 22, 2006 Share Posted June 22, 2006 it's faint in the window but I can see clearly the image there is me not really there I am see-through could this be someone else's view do they look at me and see just a reflection not really me? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Vacancy Posted June 22, 2006 Share Posted June 22, 2006 I like it. It's very simple and quick but it's still a good use of words. I especially like - not really there I am see-through could this be someone else's view Good work. =D Does it have a name? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
melrich Posted June 22, 2006 Author Share Posted June 22, 2006 No name. Just a bit bored and thought I'd play around with some words. Cheers Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted June 22, 2006 Share Posted June 22, 2006 super stuff melrich a rare combination of brevity and depth Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheRedQueen Posted June 22, 2006 Share Posted June 22, 2006 On the surface it is clever, in its core it is quite illuminating and reveals an element of quietude beyond sadness. Interesting, things that make you go hmm? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
brando Posted June 22, 2006 Share Posted June 22, 2006 i like the use of the reflection in the window Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted June 26, 2006 Share Posted June 26, 2006 Nice combination of phrases, thus making it a creative poem!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted June 26, 2006 Share Posted June 26, 2006 wow i normally don't like poems that are so short. But you packed a whole lot of meaning into that little poem and i really really like it! Keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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