EmptySoul Posted May 3, 2006 Share Posted May 3, 2006 Take everything I have to give And leave me withered on the floor You even stole my will to live And still, you're screaming more I've got bruises from the weight Of your emotions, all your needs So baby take a little more And crush me 'til it bleeds... I usually don't write rhyming poetry, I don't like it too well, but here it is...I was going to make it longer, but couldn't get out a good ending. Empty. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dazzerg Posted May 3, 2006 Share Posted May 3, 2006 Well I think this is powerful and not everything has to be long..and poetry doesnt always have to rhyme so all in all a good poem! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted May 3, 2006 Share Posted May 3, 2006 Yeah i know what you mean about rounding up rhyming poetry, kind of limits/restricts you in word use or whatever... prefer free style poems but i guess i cant get the nack of them... what you did write said alot though, i liked it.. pretty powerful to say your not one for rhyming *smiles* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted May 6, 2006 Share Posted May 6, 2006 I did really like it and i think you finished it well there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted May 6, 2006 Share Posted May 6, 2006 another great poem by a young woman who at your age should not be able to write about pain so poetically and with such insight and clarity. you are far from being empty, my friend. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AwdreeHpburn Posted May 6, 2006 Share Posted May 6, 2006 I 2nd that SB - well said. You are full of passion MTSoul... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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