neva_black_n_white Posted May 2, 2006 Share Posted May 2, 2006 Tease the blade accross my lips Cut deep a tainted smile Watch as the blood runs down - If only for a while Sew up my eyes With your fine thread And close of all the light Don't hesitate with your distruction - Enjoy this feast tonight ....................................................................................... i do have an ending for this but ... in a pickle at the min and have to go.. sorry about this. x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blueangel Posted May 2, 2006 Share Posted May 2, 2006 You are a doll, someone else's play thing. They don't care how you feel. So you don 't care anymore either. I like it. I just wanted more. It ended too quick. Like a mystery. I wanted to know more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted May 3, 2006 Author Share Posted May 3, 2006 i did have one ending for it but i guess i wasnt sure whether to put it up... i might post it send it you some time.. just needs a little work around the edges.. youve got the analysis spot on, thats how i felt when i writ it. neva x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted May 6, 2006 Share Posted May 6, 2006 I really enjoyed this poem as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted May 8, 2006 Author Share Posted May 8, 2006 smiles... i believe you has been on an ultra poem posting mission, chuckles. thanks hehe x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted May 9, 2006 Share Posted May 9, 2006 lolz well i was in the mood for reading and all your were so good. Sorry if it annoyed you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted May 9, 2006 Author Share Posted May 9, 2006 aww no, it didnt annoy me at all.. smiles... i was like "ooooh do i have a groupie?" with an exception of a few things lol, but i thought i possessed a fan almost .... chuckles. thanks.. i do appreciate it hehe. neva x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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