The_Vacancy Posted April 8, 2006 Share Posted April 8, 2006 image removed Wipe away those tears They're not even real I can tell you're smiling I know what you feel I know you're pretending And I know all your ways No more secrets now No more delays Our love is fake Your heart is a nest - It's crawling with lies Don't tell me, baby I know the rest Own up to me, angel Drown me in a lie Take me deeper For you, I'll die For you, I'll die [Pause] It's another petal wilted Another photo torn We've been broken One more rose thorn And you've got me pinned I'm on the ground The gun is loaded Pull the trigger down - For you I'll die Just to show you… I knew your lies Something differant from me, again. I don't normally write so "emotional" but whatever. It's a good song and I like the words I have used. It might not be everyones idea of a good poem, the words might be a little bit graphical or whatever but I like it. Something differant. =] I also added the cool font to the top, kind of goes with the song, yeh? ^^ Anyway, accepting any feedback, thankies. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLegend Posted April 8, 2006 Share Posted April 8, 2006 wow, that's one of the best I've read!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Vacancy Posted April 8, 2006 Author Share Posted April 8, 2006 Thanks Legend! I was kinda thinking I was getting worse at writing but that's good to hear. Appreciate it. *Thumbs up* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
From_Now_On Posted April 14, 2006 Share Posted April 14, 2006 u really are getting so good u impress me more all the time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted April 14, 2006 Share Posted April 14, 2006 better than a lot of the stuff on my fav radio station/mp3 playa/hd Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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