An Arrow Of Sorrow

[The_Vacancy]

I haven't been making many poems or lyrics lately, all out of ideas. This is completely out of the way of what I would normally write, I think. However, I am really very happy with some of the words I have used in this poem. Still not sure if all of the words actually make sense but you know... Well, accepting any constructive criticism or feedback. If anyone that reads it can understand what I mean by the poem or has some suggestions then I am all ears.

 

An arrow of sorrow [Draft]

 

I've been waiting for someone

For someone who doesn't exist

She was there, I saw her

Her eyes, they'd persist

 

A burgundy bundle of hair

And crystal-like shining eyes

A sculpted beautiful shape

And through her heart -

 

An arrow of sorrow

 

She hid her many secrets

In a maze of romance

Shattered to pieces

And tears to enchant

 

A masterpiece, she was

And invisible she seemed

With radiant red lips

And a face that beamed

 

[break]

 

But her arrow began to shake

As she fell to the ground

Her heart was pierced

And hiding from its fears

 

The arrow bought sorrow

And she turned her hand to me

A smile, she borrowed

As I lifted her to see

 

An invisible figure

Something I had dreamed

She was real

Or so it seemed…

[From_Now_On]

i like it a lot. good work. keep writing.

 

oh and p.s. i love you darlin.