Moon Goddess Posted April 5, 2006 Share Posted April 5, 2006 Detached feelings Surrounded by darkness Suffering on the inside, dying slowly No one knew, no one know the truth that lies within I'm alone Can't find you, where are you? Where'd you go? Are you lost? Am I what do we do? With this mixture of feelings I just don't know I scream but no one listens I fall to my knees pleading For redemtion, for a final chance to see my tears glisten But still inside there is something consuming... What's left of me What do I want? You How do I feel? Words cannot describe Why can't I do this? Because that's me, I can never fulfill How can I love you the way you deserve? I wish I knew I try so hard to make everyone happy But why is it? That everytime I do I end up feeling so crappy I try to be what you want The perfect girlfriend, the perfect daughter, sister, friend. But I'm sorry I can't be perfect no matter how hard I try... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted April 6, 2006 Share Posted April 6, 2006 Very intense poem, cool!!!!!!!!!!! Was it dedicated to someone, or something you're writing about yourself. If it's yourself, don't feel bad nor give up hopes, no one is perfect!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dregnought Posted April 6, 2006 Share Posted April 6, 2006 The lover/Boyfriend would be me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moon Goddess Posted April 8, 2006 Author Share Posted April 8, 2006 It was basically just how I'm feeling the boyfriend is Dregnought. It's just that I try to be what everyone wants but I fail. The poem I wrote it in school just letting out how I felt. I'm glad you liked it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darkness1235 Posted April 12, 2006 Share Posted April 12, 2006 I loved it, you're a very good writer...I can relate to it...not being able to be or do what others expect you to. It's a beutiful poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moon Goddess Posted April 14, 2006 Author Share Posted April 14, 2006 Thanks I'm glad you liked it, and you are a very good poet yourself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daddy Bear Posted April 14, 2006 Share Posted April 14, 2006 that's really good! i was stunned after i read it to see that you're only 13. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moon Goddess Posted April 17, 2006 Author Share Posted April 17, 2006 Thank You I'm glad you liked it and yeah I'm only 13 although since poems come from emotions they may seem more mature. P.S. I love your avatar I'm a Leo so I love lions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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