neva_black_n_white Posted March 18, 2006 Share Posted March 18, 2006 frozen tears collect upon your face a rejected being a rejected race you were passed out - put into the cold nothing within your arms but your dignity to hold you stood there and protested because of colour you would refuse NOT to be rejected (wasnt quite sure what to put here !!) the seasons past and you drew thin but standing strong lived a glow within they had to watch as they walked past the life they had followed - a forbidden path >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> sorry guys, i havent finished working on this but i need to run. hense the italics and how it doesnt end. sorry. neva Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yeawutever Posted March 18, 2006 Share Posted March 18, 2006 Touching poem, too bad I don't really understand the whole thing, but it's interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted March 21, 2006 Author Share Posted March 21, 2006 Thanks for the comments. After re-reading, id be surprised if anyone could really pick up on what i was trying to achieve. This one was defffinitley rough around the edges. Not a good piece. Thanks for the responce. Neva Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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