byates5637 Posted March 3, 2006 Share Posted March 3, 2006 i wrote this when i was 16 and living in a juvenile detention center...never shared it with anyone before. what do you think? Empty abdomim circular mind socially lacking eyes are a sign No motivation One thought prevails No inspiration Desperation sails "Someone's gonna die" And i know just who Everyone will wonder why No its not you! Whispers echoes in megaphones "He had it all..." If only he'd known What was his fall? Peel back many faces Experience unknown You still don't get it The horror is shown An absurd nothingness Only one thought there I couldn't care any less Gun to blank stare. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
in_the_mirror Posted March 3, 2006 Share Posted March 3, 2006 i like it, its very good, you can feel what is going through your head but at the same time you don't....if you know what i mean. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShySoul Posted March 4, 2006 Share Posted March 4, 2006 I like it. Must have been a hard and confusing time for you, and the poem reflects that. Hope things have gotten better since then. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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