Jjasonn28 Posted February 20, 2006 Share Posted February 20, 2006 Ok so this is a first for me, but whatever. I had a spontaneous urge to write, and though ive never shared this kind of stuff before, with anyone, I figure why not? Why not just share this drivel with the world go gentle.. I have sacrificed Stood tall Still, made to feel so small Picked you up, wiped away your tears Had your back When you faced fears But what does it mean Now that we are apart Pushed away, a forced new start All my love - a failure still Drained of life, of love Of will So now I will run away from fears Haunting thoughts Of the past four years. Find a hole where I can hide This tear drenched journey I will ride With fantasy's of your saving grace I'll wither here Without a face. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShySoul Posted February 20, 2006 Share Posted February 20, 2006 For your first time writing, that was darn good. Could tell it was from the heart. And that is what makes a good poem, writing about what you feel. If you found it helped you express yourself, keep writing. I liked it. And I hope you feel better about what happened. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hosswhispra Posted February 21, 2006 Share Posted February 21, 2006 Very reflective, touching and expressive, JP.... hosswhispra Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted February 25, 2006 Share Posted February 25, 2006 Great job! As shySoul said when you wright from yourheart you do it best! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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