tranquil Posted February 12, 2006 Share Posted February 12, 2006 Okay, I made this poem for my boyfriend for Valentines Day...I know he'll like the idea because he is a very artistic person. Plus I don't really have any other idea of what he would like lol. The problem is it doesn't really seem to flow for me. It's an open poem, so it doesn't rhyme. But if you see anything that you think I could make better, could you please tell me? I want it to be perfect for him It is impossible To put into words My feelings for you Ever since the first day I laid my eyes on you I knew it was meant to be Friends at first Then it grew Now I can't take My eyes off you Thoughts of you Fill my head Day in and day out It almost scares me How much I like you And I keep wondering How much do you like me? I hope it's as much as I like you But it seems almost impossible To match my love I keep thinking You're the one This is going to last You fill my dreams My every thought I hope you don't take this As me forcing you into anything It's okay that you don't kiss me I don't want to rush you into anything Hugs are enough I can't believe How hard it is To put into words how I feel It's not that I don't want to kiss you… It's just I like you enough To not rush anything. I hope you like me As much as I like you Happy Valentines Day Thanks for any comments and advice. - Melissa Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mrocza Posted February 12, 2006 Share Posted February 12, 2006 I think he'll appreciate the poem you originally wrote, without imput for others because it's straight from the heart. And honestly, it's not that bad! Good luck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tranquil Posted February 12, 2006 Author Share Posted February 12, 2006 aw thanks fairie16 lmao im just really nervous about this because this is our first valentines day together we just started going out january 17 so its almost a month now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShySoul Posted February 12, 2006 Share Posted February 12, 2006 Don't be nervous tranquil, he will love it because it is from the heart. The relationship may be new, but your feelings are deep. And that poem was a beautiful way of expressing them. Hope you have a fun Valentine's day. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tranquil Posted February 12, 2006 Author Share Posted February 12, 2006 thank you shysoul, i hope you have an awesome valentines day too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mrocza Posted February 13, 2006 Share Posted February 13, 2006 aw thanks fairie16 lmao im just really nervous about this because this is our first valentines day together we just started going out january 17 so its almost a month now Lol, don't be nervous. It's really sweet. Are you making the card as well? Orrrrrrrr.... Why don't you get a large picture frame....on one side, have the poem typed out in nice font, or hand written and then a picture of both of you next to it. Both framed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShySoul Posted February 13, 2006 Share Posted February 13, 2006 Why don't you get a large picture frame....on one side, have the poem typed out in nice font, or hand written and then a picture of both of you next to it. Both framed Ohhhh. I love it. Great idea fairie. I'm going to have to remember that so I can use it one day. tranquil - Bet the smile on his face will be huge when he sees it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tranquil Posted February 13, 2006 Author Share Posted February 13, 2006 lol that sounds like an awesome idea fairie16, but i cant use it cuz i dont have any pictures of him, or me either lmao. But I can use it next year! or for his birthday, cuz thats closer lmao! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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