From_Now_On Posted December 30, 2005 Share Posted December 30, 2005 It's true, I don't remember much Smiling innocent Your less innocent touch I remember being there The girl with the butterfly clips in her hair Trusting, allowing, inviting it all Little girl ...with a voice so small Still, old enough to know that stuff I fear, It was my fault you were so near Innocence (and my sanity since) Robbed bare Did you steal, Or did I share? I remember kisses And quiet laughter And secrets and hands With fingers Eversearching And our plans To run away together In a jeep In summer weather To your cabin ...forever? With nobody around I swear not so make a sound I don't remember living life without a care Only butterfly clips In tangled blonde hair [ It's just a rough draft i guess. ] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darkblue Posted December 30, 2005 Share Posted December 30, 2005 Powerful. I liked it - especially: Innocence (and my sanity since) Robbed bare Did you steal, Or did I share? That was particularly good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShySoul Posted December 30, 2005 Share Posted December 30, 2005 Very powerful. Really like it. Interesting how the mind can pick out something small like butterfly clips as the lasting image of an experience of that magnitude. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadows Light Posted December 30, 2005 Share Posted December 30, 2005 Wow.. agreed very powerful. Butterfly clips. It ties it all in together. The reader can interject the age. Yikes... Very powerful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mun Posted December 30, 2005 Share Posted December 30, 2005 Pretty good rough draft. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jonboy582 Posted January 2, 2006 Share Posted January 2, 2006 Innocence (and my sanity since) Robbed bare Did you steal, Or did I share? I aswell think that is a truly powerfull line. That line stood out at me and so did this. I don't remember living life without a care Only butterfly clips In tangled blonde hair Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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