sasha12 Posted September 19, 2005 Share Posted September 19, 2005 I waited for you by the phone knowing that you would never call or come home I tried a new stratagie called NC but found out it was really hard for me we took a break to clear our minds it seems like it's been forever in my mind i don't know what will happen next i'm getting lonely with much regrets i miss you so much i could die i'm really tired of all the lies you care about me i know you do your just a fool for saying that were thru i hope one day you see the light and forget about all our fights i know you loved me once is it so difficult for you to forgive me that we have to end our love permenantly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sasha12 Posted September 19, 2005 Author Share Posted September 19, 2005 i need some help with this poem can anyone help me? i'm not to good with poetry but i would like help to make this sound better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
studygirl Posted September 20, 2005 Share Posted September 20, 2005 I think it sounds pretty good - poetry is a very personal thing, I don't know if there is a "right" way to write it. As far as sounding better, maybe just make sure each of the lines have a similar rhythm. I like it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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