stratguy620 Posted August 18, 2005 Share Posted August 18, 2005 Ive never really written any poetry before, but Ive always wanted to. My gf and I have been having a hard time lately, and I really needed to get some feelings out, so I just wrote down some short random feelings. Please tell me what you think, or feel free to give me any kind of specific or general advice. As the sky cries it's final tears for us, so do I Sitting, waiting, and counting the seconds until that time Begging for your touch, but afraid of it too ------------------------------------------ My heart has burned for you since the beginning But now it burns for a different reason The flame of passion and the heat of romance are no more Now there is a burning anger raging in my heart --------------------------------------------- Why does her love have to hurt the way it does? How can something so simple and serene and beautiful turn into this frantic mesh of anger, guilt, and grief? I long for one last touch of her cheek, one last kiss on her forehead, one last warm embrace Never before have I hoped for anything more That we will one day be joined again Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thetruthintheformofhiphop Posted August 19, 2005 Share Posted August 19, 2005 Im actually a poet my self and a pretty awsome one to(2 years), I think that is pretty good,no doubt about it. ~freaking nice work dude Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stratguy620 Posted August 20, 2005 Author Share Posted August 20, 2005 Anyone else??? Id really like some feedback advice... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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