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"The Pain"

 

The pain inside builds up everyday,

and every breath is painful,

I look in the mirror

and see a person who tried to change themselves

 

How can I explain how I feel,....

The struggling I suffered.....

every morning I wake up I can hear the voices of pain...

 

The days are to short,

and the nights are too long,

and every day my heart grows weaker,...

as days pass by

 

The wind gets colder,

as my days turn older,

the memories from the past haunts my night.....

 

This pain I can never forget,

it makes me who I am today...

 

"I Die"

 

I lie here waiting

thinking

Thoughts without purity

I can see your eyes

I can smell your scent

I can feel your touch

I can hear your breath

and taste your flesh

If my sins were yours, we would both lie

in this hell together

but it could have all been better

If I gave you my mind

I would have talked to you

If I gave you my body

I would have given you my respect

If I gave you my heart

I would have given you my devotion

If I gave you my soul

I would have given you my trust

I open my eyes wondering

would you do anything

would I do everything

What's left of me drips

down inside of you

You sleep, I dream

You hurt, I bleed

You cry, I die

 

"Welcome to my World"

 

Into the broken stream, of lost and shattered dreams.

A world that is desolate and lonely.

My cries go unheard, my voice dead in all of my words.

Lost is my soul. Heart black as coals, or so they think.

Welcome to my world. Home of sadness, harbor of war.

Frozen shores of broken hope. This is my world.

Once lit by love, now lies in betrayed and disrepair.

Holding my head, to stop the horror I see.

Sometimes I want to die. The abyss is calling me.

Welcome to my world. Sanctuary of darkness, home of evil.

The cold, dark water calls me. I can't ignore it.

I fade into black. This is my world.

My happiness is sucked by the monster. The one who abolishes peace.

No hope for me, no escape from the nightmare.

The voices haunt me. In the only refuge I have.

The darkness that wins will absorb into me.

Bleeding into me, the monster's haughty laugh.

His hand, the blood is dry. Welcome to my world.

The soulless monster's eyes are burning red.

His haunting voice says I am dead. I hear him. I smell him.

His vile breath reeks of death. No one can save me.

The agony he brings. My heart sings to be torn out.

The monster has done so many times. It is my blood on his hands.

How divine. He whispers each time. You are mine. I control your destiny.

And it happens again. Welcome to my world.

Welcome to the horror of my soul.

 

 

"My Antidote"

 

Every night I lay in bed

with pain and desperation

I pray to God that

I won't wake again

my mind blank with anticipation.

 

I wake the next morning

and look around

I realize I am still here

God didn't save me

from this damn place

and I bend over and bleed

from my fear.

 

My mind is in a trance

they say I'm not me,

I'll get over it eventually...

the truth is

I ran out of tears

So I bleed the pain all out of me.

 

Smaller and smaller I become

I'm wasting away from here

soon I'll be gone

inside of myself

meanwhile, it's with this pencil I will disappear.

 

As I run this pencil back and forth

against my pale skin

blood gushes out

and I have a new scar

and through the cut lead poisoning rushes in.

 

I smile at my silver cuts

and all my bones

you can see jutting out

I smile at my disgusting life

while away on a cloud i float...

this is MY ANTIDOTE.

 

"The End is Near"

 

Silent screams

Tears unseen

As I slash

To create a gash

So that this will all be over

In a flash

No more depression

Or trying to make a good impression

No fake smiles

Or secret trails

No more wishing I was dieing

No longer staying up the whole night crying

No more lying

No more denying

My end is near

But I feel no fear

Thou I shed a tear

As I watch the blood flow free

Dripping out of me

Mixing with my tears

As they hit the floor

No one knows what is going on

 

Behind my closed door

My vision fails

As death impales my heart

And I know now my end is here.

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all i can say is get aguitar and get into songwriting, poems are better with a melody, in fact im writing a song at the moment about a teenager who is going to commit suicide and the song is basically is suicide note to his mom but im having trouble with lyrics as ive never ever thought about suicide, i think it would be best to talk to someone who has been through it.

 

Stevie Mac

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