toad4466 Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 I would love your feedback on this, it took me only a little while to write. I am in so much pain, its hard to write, so what do you all think? Here I walk, on this ground, like a twisted shadow from another land. Never at peace, always alone, searching for a proper home. I hum to myself an age old song, and I seem to be alone, Why can't I find a proper home? Because in this life, I am alone. Ben Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tigris Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 I like it ben. Why are you in so much pain? Take care. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lifeiscash Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Sounds like your real lonely... good write.. my advice would be try not to focus on the negative sides of being alone.. its good to be independent and to be able to depend on yourself. It does, however, get to you sometimes.. when you do feel down about things.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tigris Posted July 29, 2005 Share Posted July 29, 2005 Ben are you on medication for depression? Have you seen a doctor? The pains you've got are they all over your body? Do some hurt more than others? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
swift44 Posted July 30, 2005 Share Posted July 30, 2005 its good but we'd like to know whats wrong, cause on this site where we all hurtin we'd liek to help Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
petalbud Posted July 30, 2005 Share Posted July 30, 2005 Nice poem Ben,..Good choice of words. "like a twisted shadow from another land."-- I can totally relate to that line. U knw u can PM me if u feel this down. "it cant be rainy all the time"--- You know who this is... xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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