To the best person I ever knew

[sorryJason]

I know the last part doesn't really work, but here it is!

 

Let me be your wings

 

Let me be your wings,

let me lift you above

the things that hurt

and fly you up to love

 

Let me be your angel

Let let me lift up your soul

let me take you places

you thought you'd never know

 

Let me be your sun

lighting up the dark

let me heal the pain

that has torn us upart

 

Let me be your love

I can take you higher

higher than heaven above

and set you free, with my love

[arwen]

I like this poem. It's really good!

 

I agree on the last part, but I wouldn't know how to change it In my opinion, the first three parts form one whole, and it can be just a great poem without the last.

 

Ilse.

[lunatic]

I really liked your poem Jay and it does seem that we are on the same wave lengh in terms of pain. If your getting relief from your poetry then please keep going. Right now this is the only outlet that seems to help me sort out my feelings.

 

Your poem was really good and I do agree with the end part. I dont really know how I would arrange it to make it work. You might want to play around with the wording a bit. I really should not talk because my poems suck. I love your work bro keep them coming.

 

I have to admit that I have not felt this crappy in a very long time. I hate this feeling in my heart that will not let me perk up. I have been so depressed and misurable since this whole thing fell apart and we broke up. I feel so badly and I dont know how I am to cope anymore.