dpressedone89 Posted July 27, 2005 Share Posted July 27, 2005 i close my eyes and clench my teeth, the barrel cold as death, yes death indeed so fitting for this moment the barrel up under my chin i see the end is here i pull, and in seconds im staring at the sky laying in peace, each cloud a carrier of my soul. i black out i awoke at the gates of my would be heaven i walked to the gate and asked for admittence then a voice from above came to me you are not welcome in my kingdom i ask why father? why? because your hands, they have the blood of innocence but ive taken my self and my self alone no more than i were affected the response came and echoed my own thoughts to take one life is to take all of humanity -stitches im not upset, thats just whats running through my mind right now, comments? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
frustratedWithLife Posted July 27, 2005 Share Posted July 27, 2005 Impressive poem! You have a talent for words, but I'd be curious to find out why you've written something like this if you're not upset. Normally (in my limited experience) something like this doesn't usually come to mind on "good" days. I've written a few things like this, but it's always been linked to not enough sleep, bad day, relationship issues, etc... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darkblue Posted July 28, 2005 Share Posted July 28, 2005 Dark, religious and well written. Excellent work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted July 28, 2005 Share Posted July 28, 2005 Your poems answer themselves. There doesnt seem to be a myth about them, you seem to know the conclusion before you start. Its odd to read, i mean, i assume alot of people have questions answered when they read your poems. They seem full as thought they dont need an answer yet you seem to be asking so many indirect questions. I like it. Im intrigued. Kell. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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