From_Now_On Posted July 23, 2005 Share Posted July 23, 2005 "You Kept My Secrets & Broke Your Promises" I remember walking through the woods with you And the tall green grass we were wading through I hesitantly whispered my darkest secret I've never known much of trust But I choose to believe that you would keep it It's funny how you can know someone so much And how the deepest impression can be left by the lightest touch And how you can know me better than anybody else You told me you longed to live for me Even more than for yourself There's no question in my mind that you meant it then That look in your eyes could not have been pretend But our human tendencies get the better of us sometimes While you forgot your words I just closed my eyes I waited for you to look back at me and remember But it took so long and soon I knew this was no exception to forever Being out of reach for me I tried so hard to hold on But some things aren't meant to be You know I don't cry hardly at all You're the only one who knows why my self-image is so small And if you're wondering there are still times at night I lie awake Unable to fall asleep as I finish peeling away the day's smiles That only you would have known were fake I think back to all the times we had And all of the memories that were so sad How perhaps no one will understand us the way we do each other How I can't help but love you a little And know I'll always wonder What if we'd been older when we met? If you hadn't strayed we'd be together yet I know you know it even as you find ways to place the blame on me You've always said I'm the only one The one who can't give you everything you need And your words clash and contradict time and time again You say that you love me but that we can't be friends It's one thing to know my deepest secrets locked inside But I've learned you'll never understand me 'Til you can push this selfishness aside Maybe that is never And I thought I could wait forever Now I know I can't take a backseat at every turn I guess friends just can't be lovers I guess you live and learn (Just a rough draft. Been trying to put these feelings into words for a long time now.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dpressedone89 Posted July 23, 2005 Share Posted July 23, 2005 wow, that was great well written and i could feel the emotion as i read it. i can really relate to it too. you did a great job writing it. please keep writing you have talent -sTiTcHeS Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
From_Now_On Posted July 23, 2005 Author Share Posted July 23, 2005 wow, that was great well written and i could feel the emotion as i read it. i can really relate to it too. you did a great job writing it. please keep writing you have talent -sTiTcHeS Thanks for the comment. And I absolutely love your signiture there...the quote I mean. Anyway, I'm glad you liked the poem. Sorry to hear you can relate tho. Bleh. Take Care. -FNO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mieshagirl Posted July 23, 2005 Share Posted July 23, 2005 I definitly like the poem. Good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GettingOverIt Posted August 9, 2005 Share Posted August 9, 2005 This is so heart-wrenching, and not just because I know the experience behind the words, but because you have this wonderful way of expressing things that just makes everything pop off the page... It reaches out and grabs the reader, takes him (or her) along for the ride, and leaves him (her) on the side of the road to feel and experience your pain through your words... You can conjure up a memory in the reader - whether the reader is on the hurting side or the side of the one who did the hurting - it's like being able to see both sides at the same time... Really, amazing.... Wonderfully amazing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
From_Now_On Posted August 12, 2005 Author Share Posted August 12, 2005 Thanks as always to all for the comments. And Gettingoverit especially since sharing them with you is always the closest to me seeing them myself as you know me better than anybody. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moon Goddess Posted September 20, 2005 Share Posted September 20, 2005 I love that poem it so full of emotion.Very Nice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bilal72401 Posted September 23, 2005 Share Posted September 23, 2005 great job, i loved it soo much, i was pulled into it so well! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protex Posted September 27, 2005 Share Posted September 27, 2005 Once again your writing amazes me. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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