petalbud Posted June 13, 2005 Share Posted June 13, 2005 I cried You laughed Beneath your stiff False smile You mocked me I came to you To talk To explain to you Why I feel the way I do "It's okay Honey" You say "You can talk to me anytime" I believed you Your sweet Lies Dripping from your lips Like honey I licked it up Nice and clean It tasted good Ah! Sweet Lies I was Hurt You betrayed me Laughed at me Told me I was nothing I've retreated Shrunk into a little ball Sicked up all the lies I naively licked up I rock back and forth In the darkness Of my own little room I'm safe from you now Your sweet honey lies. I usually write prose,. but This is my first poem in a while ,. tell me what you think, im open to comments and ideas. thnx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I_love_rain_hugs_and_you Posted June 13, 2005 Share Posted June 13, 2005 I am interested in what these "lies" were. Have you considered that the "liarer" in this poem really thinks that they are telling the truth. Maybe they have deceived themselves, as well as deceiving you. Self deception is an interesting thing, and can make one believe they are innocent of even attrocious crimes (ie. OJ Simpson thinking he is innocent). Anyway, its a really good poem, so now I am going to go write a poem!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
petalbud Posted June 14, 2005 Author Share Posted June 14, 2005 Thnx for ur comment, i wrote this poem first thing after I woke up because i had these words playing in my mind. I would say its mainy about my naiveity,. me being too trusting . Thinking of people as something they weren't even though i knew who they really were. i guess there is an element of self-deception in there. I tend to shy away frm the truth, when it hurts and convince myself otherwise. Thnx for ur reply,... helpd me see things in a newlight. As for the "lies".. well,. theyre two sides to it. The lies ive told myself,. and the lies that Ive been told... Im "sicking them up" in the last verse because ive come to realise that they're doing me no good...... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sadness_Creeping Posted June 18, 2005 Share Posted June 18, 2005 Wow, I REALLY like your poem petalbud! You wrote basically what I feel about a someone at the moment. I have feelings for her, which I think she knows(girls tend to know that) I feel she doesnt want to have anything to do with me, but still talks to me...and is nice...just to string me along, I guess it makes her feel good. I've recently decided that its not heathly for me to talk to her anymore, It seems to hurt too much. Anyways, keep up the good work -SC Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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