blueangel Posted May 17, 2005 Share Posted May 17, 2005 I wake up with the red sun To see the autumn skies I'm lying in the darkness A place locked deep inside Some say they can see me But it's hard to tell If they are pretending For the shadows hide me well Even under the white moon That cradles me as I sleep My own safe cocoon While waiting to break free And into sweet surrender Of the haunting light That guides me in my dreams To the Savior of my life Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blueangel Posted May 17, 2005 Author Share Posted May 17, 2005 I beg you to reply Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raphael256 Posted May 17, 2005 Share Posted May 17, 2005 Nice one. I was surprised you're only 14 from what you write btw. You're very mature for your age, and very talented. You're amazing me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sam_i-am Posted May 17, 2005 Share Posted May 17, 2005 like your poem that is a great poem keep up the good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Caesium Posted May 17, 2005 Share Posted May 17, 2005 Good poem. I agree with one of the other replyers you do seem very mature for ur age. Keep up the work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mattj Posted May 18, 2005 Share Posted May 18, 2005 very nice poem i can se what you are trying to mean- oh and as a sidenote i love nature symbolism! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted May 19, 2005 Share Posted May 19, 2005 don't let the world around you keep you in your cocoon/room. Get out, lifes a party, fight the fury. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blueangel Posted May 25, 2005 Author Share Posted May 25, 2005 waiting for my time to shine Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
amour_13 Posted May 25, 2005 Share Posted May 25, 2005 I LOVED your poem. You write very well and I look forward to reading more of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blueangel Posted May 25, 2005 Author Share Posted May 25, 2005 If I post more. I'm paranoid somebody will steal Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Siraf Posted June 5, 2005 Share Posted June 5, 2005 Don't worry, nobody will steal your poems. They're too good lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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