mattj Posted May 7, 2005 Share Posted May 7, 2005 The crystal shards lie ruined, The dark crept through the door, The joy of my illusions, Lies shattered on the floor. No solice in the the sunshine, No softness in the grass, No comfort in the calling out The things that came to pass A cloud upon the hilltop, A flower down the well, A light burned out my vision, So down through the void i fell. False dreams, false thought, false joy, false pain, My mind is nought but anguish, so in silence i remain Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
in_the_mirror Posted May 7, 2005 Share Posted May 7, 2005 i really liked it keep up the good work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted May 8, 2005 Share Posted May 8, 2005 hey. i really enjoyed reading your poem. it reminded me of times where i have felt completely blank or as if my emotions didnt belong. i know that things can come to a point where everything feels false but then again everything can be falsifiable providing someone questions it, and i think thats the best thing. i mean when someone can question what is right or wrong or something that is true or isnt it can become saomething a lot greater. i mean when it comes to relationships for example, and we try to feel nothing or pass them by once they end rough, i think people can fail to see that part of that must have been a positive time for you to remain in the relationship... so yeah there are times we like to forget, but if we are falsifiable we have the right to change opinions, and we realise part of it was great or why would we hurt. i dont think this makes as much sense as what id have liked it to. but its a great poem. Kel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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