Elfdrinkingtea Posted April 30, 2005 Share Posted April 30, 2005 Letting Go I lie awake in this unbroken stillness Images of you, leaving me breathless The beauty of your smile, the charm of your eyes These memories of you are the best I have, I now realize Those memories used to keep me warm. But now they are just meaningless form. I remembered when, we use to talk, While we were having our afternoon walk. One cloudy afternoon, I opened my heart It was the day that you torn it apart. I said I love you, but you didn't say it back You can not be mine, and that's a fact. I want our hands, to intertwine But you just want to be friends. Ok, fine. Your heart belongs to another. It leaves me here to suffer. What am I suppose to do? You can't make a person fall in love with you. This is such a painful feeling. I will need time for healing So, I must let my feeling for you go. It the only solution that I know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mattj Posted April 30, 2005 Share Posted April 30, 2005 not sure how this got on the wrong thread- that is a nice poem though Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
From_Now_On Posted May 3, 2005 Share Posted May 3, 2005 I want our hands, to intertwine But you just want to be friends. Ok, fine. ..... What am I suppose to do? You can't make a person fall in love with you. I liked those lines a lot. I liked it all though. The idea of it and the poem itself. Nice job. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SugarSweetness407 Posted May 3, 2005 Share Posted May 3, 2005 Very good...keep it up!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted May 8, 2005 Share Posted May 8, 2005 Good job. These are the lines I like: I lie awake in this unbroken stillness Images of you, leaving me breathless Empty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted May 8, 2005 Share Posted May 8, 2005 wow, i think, unfortunatley, it does take raw emotion to make a great poe. and i think thats how yours has come accross, i think poems like this, often dont need great thought but instead its instinctive or completely from the heart. i think your poem speak alot more than just the words itself, i think it says alot about yourself and what type of person youll be. i think there are a lot of reasons within that show why she probably does love you as a friend. most people dont acknowledge that you cant make a person love them. but at the same time, people dont also realise that love can be in different forms. for example the love can be for a friend. i mean when in love you love that person for who they are and what they are but at the same time, a person is entirely different when they are in love with you also so you love that part of them. so, if you love a person who doesnt love you, it is possible that you love them for who they are in respects of a friendship. its only a different opinion. but i loved your poem. sorry you got hurt to actually write this. Kel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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