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A final plea


The Artist

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Where have you gone?

I never see you

What's going on?

What are you up to?

you never talk

you never write

you don't answer the phone

you're compleatly ou of sight

 

you say you need me

but you're never there

you ask for me to come

but you wont say where

I try to go to you

but you always hide

you shut the door on me

when i try come inside

 

what's gotten into you

what have you done

to get yourself in this mess

that's going on

you gotta pull yourself together

to set things stright

got to try get through all this

before it's all too late

 

the house is empty

cold and bare

this place is lifeless

when you're not there

where are you going now

are you coming home?

well I see your face again

or will you die alone?

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Wow, i like it, i like it a lot. it seems powerful, to all youir questions you seem to come to blunt yet positive conclusions. its like you have so much to say and just waited for the oppoutinities to scream them out. i like the idea of your poem. its seems to work on several levels, it could be obvious yet i think there can be a string of metaphors within it. your very creative, i dont think you try to make it too hard to distinguish a meaning yet you leave it for portrayal. i enjoyed reading it.

 

thanks. top notch in my eyes.

maybe theres background to it?

 

Kel.

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