alone i feel.

[chronalax]

this is my first poem,

so yea any sugestions (other then spelling) would be nice 8)

 

alone i feel.

 

Alone i feel when im with you,

alone i feel when i am not,

but please go away,

leave me,so alone is all i got,

i cant be near you,

but to be separated is worse,

all alone i wait,

for a chance to show my worth,

 

you tore my heart out so i cant feel,

leave me bleeding trying to heal,

as my wound gets coverd i see you near,

and as you come a single tear,

knowing that i love you so,

the longing for you begins to grow,

 

i look down then at her face,

she made it clear i know my place,

i turn around and say goodbye,

she begs me to stop as she crys,

i jumped off before her eyes,

its not her fault i couldnt heal,

i did this so, alone i'd no longer feel.

[HelpmePLz]

it ok do a little work on it

[chronalax]

k thanx, yea ima send it to my sis so she can fix it up a bit

[HelpmePLz]

its pritty good

[chronalax]

thanx again 8)

[EmptySoul]

I like the line:

leave me,so alone is all i got

 

Empty

[chronalax]

heh thanx,