curtis blow Posted March 19, 2005 Share Posted March 19, 2005 Is this what you want Every finger points at me This might be funny If it wasn't such a tragedy After a while It gets harder to smile And pretend that things are ok So when you need the in the middle of the night I won't be there cos you're always breaking my heart You're always breaking my heart You always tear it apart So cross yourself now Get down on your knees and pray But no powers from heaven Could ever take the darkness away I've tried climbing the walls But you've built them too tall So it's time I walk away now And when you call me in the middle of the night There's no one there cos you're always breaking my heart You're always breaking my heart You always tear it apart Reach out a hand to hold Ain't it sad when the distance grows Two hearts cling to their fates Remember that first embrace But I can't worry anymore Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted March 21, 2005 Share Posted March 21, 2005 Sorry your hurting, seems like the same thoughts we all generally have. Add some of your own into this poem, I feel like you aren't taking enough of your own words... play with your structure, have fun writing your poetry, make it unique. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I_love_rain_hugs_and_you Posted March 21, 2005 Share Posted March 21, 2005 Hey whats with your display picture? Isn't that a picture of the Australian Prime Minister in a USA uniform? Talk about an identity crisis....lol..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
whatfor Posted March 25, 2005 Share Posted March 25, 2005 thats a good poem. I have read a lot of poems here and some made me cry! So yes good, keep going guys Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
From_Now_On Posted March 25, 2005 Share Posted March 25, 2005 i read over this once before...but this time I actually sat and read it...I liked it a lot, and thought I ought leave you a little comment. Thanks for posting. -FNO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted April 17, 2005 Share Posted April 17, 2005 Good job. My favorite lines: And when you call me in the middle of the night There's no one there cos you're always breaking my heart You're always breaking my heart You always tear it apart Reach out a hand to hold Ain't it sad when the distance grows Two hearts cling to their fates Remember that first embrace But I can't worry anymore I relate to your writing. Empty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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