From_Now_On Posted March 9, 2005 Share Posted March 9, 2005 Sorry...kind of had a rough night so I wrote a poem to get out some of the stress. I don't know if I like it so much as I just was feeling cruddy and wanted to write my feelings or come up with some sort of post or something...and then this is just kind of what came out. I guess it covers what's going on in my head right now. But no worries because there is no reason for alarm. Thanks. 10:26 and Counting (Still) Quarter after ten now I can still taste the aspirin on my tongue I don't know how But I can still feel the water clouding my lungs And I don't know why I can smell the gasoline on my lips Still I didn't die I can see the endless expanse of crypts In my mind… But I'm here Still Ten seventeen now I can still hear your voice and I guess in that I should feel safe Ten eighteen now Another minute I've let go to waste The seconds are ticking And these keys just keep clicking And I know I'm alive I felt the water on my skin as I closed my eyes Each drop was such a vivid sensation Each breathe deep and full Yeah, I'm alive Still It's funny to think Well, the kind of funny lacking humor That I owe my life to the taste Of crushed aspirin and peroxide On my tongue I just couldn't swallow it down And there's something about my faulty shower That never lets me drown So here I am Still Ten twenty-two now I can still envision this early evening's events in my head Knowing somehow I should be dead But no one knows I wrote my goodbyes Too exhausted to cry But I'm here Still Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PunkyMonkey Posted March 15, 2005 Share Posted March 15, 2005 I think it's a great poem...... keep writing! Your very talented =D> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted March 16, 2005 Share Posted March 16, 2005 And there's something about my faulty shower That never lets me drown cool line. When I read it, for some reason I had one of Snoop Dog's songs in my head. The one where he the deep voice go "Still" and then snoop says some oogli gook. I kinda liked the poem, mostly just the line and the clock idea. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GettingOverIt Posted March 18, 2005 Share Posted March 18, 2005 As I have read your work on here many times, I have to say, this is another where the emotions just pour off the page... I too loved the 'faulty shower' line! You are very gifted...in song, in verse... Very well done, FNO! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted March 21, 2005 Share Posted March 21, 2005 Good job. I really like it. A good line there's something about my faulty shower That never lets me drown Empty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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