PammyFoo Posted February 28, 2005 Share Posted February 28, 2005 SHALLOW GRAVE I was five and fully alive when i took a dive. The big plunge Blown in the winds like a crisp, faded autmn leaf being destroyed by bitter hands Cupped full of knives and daggers. Snowball, snowfall lands on my un-twitching features. My dead skin. My dead cells That ceased breathing long ago. Unfound I have endured blistering hells to reach my final place Here Among the dying leaves Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lost_666 Posted February 28, 2005 Share Posted February 28, 2005 it's good you've given a good sense of the atmosphere and i like it, well done! xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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