troublegal05 Posted February 6, 2005 Share Posted February 6, 2005 THis is a quick poem I wrote, I was wondering if anyone could give me some contructive criticism on how to improve this poem...thanx in advance 8) There was once a Joker who wore a cloak of Red. Mysterious to the world, his jesters were a laugh. His hat sheltered his brows and drooped to cover his ears. He was a man without a sight to a serious truth. A bell hung from the highest peak of his hat and rang to the pitch of a childs laugh. He was a man who was seeking a silence. Red sneekers cushioned the souls of his feet, he was a man who journeyed far. Crows feet walked his gentle eyes, yet the raven walked his soul. He was a man of heartache. With a sigh of a sick heart he layed a joke to death, surrendering the raven for white winged doves. He was a man of courage, called to serve a final bow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
in_the_mirror Posted February 7, 2005 Share Posted February 7, 2005 i really like your poem, quite different from what you normally see here. i love it, keep up the awesome work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
troublegal05 Posted February 7, 2005 Author Share Posted February 7, 2005 Thank you in_the_mirror for your kind respose... 8) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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