Delaurence23 Posted February 2, 2005 Share Posted February 2, 2005 I went out on a journey seeking some help to help me with my problems and the way i sulk i drown myself in the oceeans dark waves and see nothing that is beautiful i just wish this would go, its like a cancerr its eating me alive, with its jaws of death i cut to releave the stress and maybe just for one day put my soul to rest they say in our heart lies our true emotions well my heart is strong but i believe that my soul sings its last song im pumping the blood but im so far away im lost in the agony of today and im breaking through to a memory of the past that i cant seem to remissitnly pass Though theres happiness on the platter i cant reach my hand to reach it so i pull it back from the stains and the stitches of all that last and die in peace of my nest Lost...... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roasted Carrots Posted February 2, 2005 Share Posted February 2, 2005 Very emotional poetry & interesting use of rhyming schemes "but i believe that my soul sings its last song im pumping the blood but im so far away im lost in the agony of today" That was my favorite part of your poem. Everything just seems to come together...the reality of the cuts...the lonliness...the pain...endlessness...and a musical reference to boot. I like. Keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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