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This is about an average teenage girl... or so you think.

It's the girl in the back of the class... wearing the big glasses... it's the punker, the prep, the girl sports jock, the one who everyone envies... it's you... it's your sister, your neighbor, your friend. someone who's good at lying, and then ends up dead.... right in front of your eyes. Because you're blind. Open your eyes and see the girl... see yourself before it's too late

 

Just a girl

Smiling inside

Convincing everyone

That everything's fine

Such a good liar

She almost convinces herself

Until she looks into the mirror

And remembers why

There are tears running down

From her dark brown eyes

When she's alone

She's unplugged the phone

Just so that she will no longer

Have to lie

Eyes of fire

Stare back at her

From the world behind the mirror

Years of lying

Really consumes

The kindness and heat

Inside of her soul.

Causing her pain

In places only she can feel

She looks at her arms

And sees the scars

Running down from her wrists

To her elbow

Top and bottom

Deep to the soul

She remembers when each one was made

And why

They tell a story.

Wearing long sleeves to cover her arm

Hiding her once read bracelets of charm

Lookat her now

She doesn't even know

How to smile anymore

She's sick of lying, crying,

Hiding her pain

No one loves her anymore

Not even herself

Did anyone ever love her?

She wonders as she ties the knot

And a noose she places around her neck

Formed of memories

Rather than of rope

Tightened around her neck

She stands on the chair

And immediately starts on plans B

and C

Incase plan A doesn't work.

She downs three bottles of asprin

And slices her wrists

As she knocks over the chair

And one last time before she dies

She sees her reflection

in the puddles of blood

Below her dangling feet.

 

 

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Just a girl

Smiling inside

Convincing everyone

That everything's fine

Such a good liar

----In this poem, why is everything not fine? Why is the girl so unhappy?

 

She almost convinces herself

Until she looks into the mirror

And remembers why

There are tears running down

 

---is she unhappy because of her appearance?

 

From her dark brown eyes

When she's alone

She's unplugged the phone

Just so that she will no longer

Have to lie

Eyes of fire

Stare back at her

From the world behind the mirror

Years of lying

Really consumes

The kindness and heat

Inside of her soul.

Causing her pain

In places only she can feel

She looks at her arms

And sees the scars

Running down from her wrists

To her elbow

 

--Is this girl cutting herself? Why would she want to hurt herself. That is so sad!!!!!!!

 

Top and bottom

Deep to the soul

She remembers when each one was made

And why

They tell a story.

Wearing long sleeves to cover her arm

Hiding her once read bracelets of charm

Lookat her now

She doesn't even know

How to smile anymore

 

----I also feel like that......

 

She's sick of lying, crying,

Hiding her pain

No one loves her anymore

Not even herself

 

--I am sure there is someone who loves who. Maybe not the people who should love her, but someone does.....

 

Did anyone ever love her?

She wonders as she ties the knot

And a noose she places around her neck

Formed of memories

Rather than of rope

Tightened around her neck

She stands on the chair

And immediately starts on plans B

and C

Incase plan A doesn't work.

 

---there is a lot of alternatives to commiting suicide. Remember, someone could always move to another place of the world and start their life over again.....a fresh start....

 

She downs three bottles of asprin

And slices her wrists

As she knocks over the chair

And one last time before she dies

She sees her reflection

in the puddles of blood

Below her dangling feet.

 

-----hmm......goood poem but very pessimistic.........

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That was a very professionally written poem!

 

I learned something interesting somewhere that with our right brains we only learn and understand and create, our left brain gives us words that are logical and sound good.

 

I think that poetry brings together those two parts of the brain.

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