The Artist Posted January 8, 2005 Share Posted January 8, 2005 her insides are burning from all the strain of what little goes in comes back out again nothing left to hide except her shame from the memories of her past that still bring her pain piece by piece she fades away another part of her seems to vanish each day it seems that what she was has vanished into thin air if she turned to her side she would not be there no one seems to notice that things aren't right they pass her by obvious as she puts up her fight it's happened once again it's all the same will there ever be an end to these torturous games 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
From_Now_On Posted January 8, 2005 Share Posted January 8, 2005 Nice poem....very sad =( 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Scout Posted January 8, 2005 Share Posted January 8, 2005 It's a very beautiful, sad and heartfelt poem. If it's based on your own personal experiences, know that you can always post on eNotalone and talk about them. It might help. I'd just like to point out that you have "torturous" spelled incorrectly. The correct spelling is how I have it in the quotation marks. Other than that, a great poem! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prosper Posted January 8, 2005 Share Posted January 8, 2005 Hi Pal, That sounds a good poem.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Artist Posted January 9, 2005 Author Share Posted January 9, 2005 Thanks everyone, sorry about the spelling error, as you can see I'm not the world's best speller, I've fixed it up now though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EmptySoul Posted January 11, 2005 Share Posted January 11, 2005 Really great job. Your words all fit together well. I'm guessing (but could be wrong) that you wrote this poem from personal experience. I've struggled with being a cutter, not an eating disorder, but you're welcome to talk to me. Empty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naecha Posted January 24, 2005 Share Posted January 24, 2005 Hey Artist, I think that's a totally awesome poem! I loved it. I wish I could write good poems like that! Please keep posting your poems! My poems never rhyme!! Naecha xoxo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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