melrich Posted January 6, 2005 Share Posted January 6, 2005 it's faint in the window but I can see clearly the person there is me no weight or depth it is see-through could this be someone else's view could they look at me and see just an image not really me? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lookingformyredangel Posted January 6, 2005 Share Posted January 6, 2005 this is relly good. Simple yet exquisit. I like it. it's like you are truelly "seeing" me bravo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
boredguy Posted January 6, 2005 Share Posted January 6, 2005 its a short poem but it really does pack a solid punch. good job ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
From_Now_On Posted January 8, 2005 Share Posted January 8, 2005 I really love this poem. The idea behind it, the wording choices. It's so simple but so powerful in what is meaning to be said. There's one thing I would change...and that's the structure of the stanzas. I think it's better read: it's faint in the window but I can see clearly the person there is me no weight or depth it is see-through could this be someone else's view could they look at me and see just an image not really me? It just seems to flow that way. But I suppose that's just my personal preference. In any case, I love the poem. Keep writing. =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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