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Do you ever feel like this?


melrich

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I really love this poem. The idea behind it, the wording choices. It's so simple but so powerful in what is meaning to be said. There's one thing I would change...and that's the structure of the stanzas. I think it's better read:

 

it's faint in the window

but I can see

clearly the person there is me

 

no weight or depth

it is see-through

could this be someone else's view

 

could they look at me and see

just an image

not really me?

 

 

It just seems to flow that way. But I suppose that's just my personal preference. In any case, I love the poem.

 

Keep writing. =)

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