Finchabald Posted January 2, 2005 Share Posted January 2, 2005 this is the first poem ive posted on here so here we go. It's my life I live It's also the price I have to pay For being me, the one who loves but is unloved I guess I should take the knife And spill the blood Living my life's not hard enough Burn me alive inside Take everything away No one will notice No one will care No one will give and honest f**k About what will happen to me They'll walk in on me and sigh Blood's all over the floor And they'll wonder why And they'll just shrug And say who gives a f**k if he died And I'll be in heaven or hell Listening to those words they say And out of my lie scarred shell My darker side will take the day I'll punish all of them I'll rape, ravage, purge and slay I always was a favorite of death Well now that's who I am Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BellaDonna Posted January 2, 2005 Share Posted January 2, 2005 Finchabald, Your poem is certainly dark. (I'm sure that was the point of it). You definitely released feelings of depression and anger with your poem, which is a good thing because that's what poetry is for. I just hope your thoughts keep coming out in written form instead of in actions. Keep writing and posting when you feel like this. BellaDonna Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Delaurence23 Posted January 3, 2005 Share Posted January 3, 2005 great poem great expressive words been there before.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
drahcir Posted January 3, 2005 Share Posted January 3, 2005 Hey, atleast its good that you expressed how you feel. One time I was really mad at this girl who hated me for no reason, who I wrote a poem about beating her up. I am not proud of it, but I needed to find a way to express how I felt. I named the poem "Slap the B##(("...hehe....but after writing the poem I felt better. Its not good to have anger inside that you just keep bottled up...... Just think about the future and what sort of future life you will be leaving behind if you commit suicide.......i mean....future career, future friends, future wife.....just think about that..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Finchabald Posted January 4, 2005 Author Share Posted January 4, 2005 thanks for all your views on my poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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