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[Coreynwtx]

I stand alone in the dark

feeling that my heart

is forever lost

My world has forever changed

for better or worse i can not tell

friends i have left

friends i will never meet

my heart is torn

i stand in my sorrow

I look up in to the never ending darkness

when a light appears

i do not follow this light in fear of a fake

but to my weary heart you should appear

the darkness encassing my heart has dissapered

now surrounded in feelings and emotions i care not to explain

is it love that my heart feels

i look onto your deep eyes and see a ray of hope

maybey i have found my ever lasting light

in the eyes of another

i shake out my doubt

and find in you the love of ages

i wish to hold you forever knowing that all will be alright

and then i see that what my heart was searching for was not far

infact it was there all along

[neva_black_n_white]

I think your poem was original so thats something i deffinitley liked about it. I thought that you added depth to your poem because i think we have heard of love becoming a light to darkness but the reason i felt yours was original to me was your explanation and contrasts. I dont rate but i do think its good.

 

kel.