Coreynwtx Posted December 24, 2004 Share Posted December 24, 2004 I stand alone in the dark feeling that my heart is forever lost My world has forever changed for better or worse i can not tell friends i have left friends i will never meet my heart is torn i stand in my sorrow I look up in to the never ending darkness when a light appears i do not follow this light in fear of a fake but to my weary heart you should appear the darkness encassing my heart has dissapered now surrounded in feelings and emotions i care not to explain is it love that my heart feels i look onto your deep eyes and see a ray of hope maybey i have found my ever lasting light in the eyes of another i shake out my doubt and find in you the love of ages i wish to hold you forever knowing that all will be alright and then i see that what my heart was searching for was not far infact it was there all along Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neva_black_n_white Posted December 24, 2004 Share Posted December 24, 2004 I think your poem was original so thats something i deffinitley liked about it. I thought that you added depth to your poem because i think we have heard of love becoming a light to darkness but the reason i felt yours was original to me was your explanation and contrasts. I dont rate but i do think its good. kel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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