Protex Posted December 22, 2004 Share Posted December 22, 2004 Unconditional Beautiful brown, eyes which you have. Views the depths of your love the vast canyons and valleys of your affection. To see such eyes, without that love. Makes them only blackened and empty, with space to fill, space to be filled with my regret. My body cringes, I collapse to the ground. My lungs gasp, nothing to breathe without the sweet, warm, air of your love. My heart stops, and with one last beat it mutters 'I'm sorry'. Motionless I lie, As you kneel down beside me. Whispering my form of rebirth. You tell me you love me. I rise, and tell you that you are my life. With my eyes open, and fixed on yours. I see the very love, whose absense killed me. My lungs gasp, I inhale my very being. And realize, how lucky I am to be alive. Just wrote it, after I realized exactly how lucky I am to be loved by this one special person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Finchabald Posted December 22, 2004 Share Posted December 22, 2004 thats really good. based on you finding love? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protex Posted December 22, 2004 Author Share Posted December 22, 2004 Based on me being stupid, and coming too close to losing love. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Finchabald Posted December 22, 2004 Share Posted December 22, 2004 ok. but your still with them? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protex Posted December 22, 2004 Author Share Posted December 22, 2004 Yes, thanks to our love being as strong as it was. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Finchabald Posted December 22, 2004 Share Posted December 22, 2004 thats really gd to hear. its also interesting to see a poem with a happy ending on this forum. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protex Posted December 22, 2004 Author Share Posted December 22, 2004 Glad you like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForAnother Posted December 23, 2004 Share Posted December 23, 2004 Your last stanza... is golden. I don't like your mushy first two (they too overused ideas)... but your last stanza... i am speachless... god it is written beautifully. Excellently written. Touched me. ForAnother Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
From_Now_On Posted December 23, 2004 Share Posted December 23, 2004 That's really very good. It's also great to hear you did not lose this person. The happy ending was refreshing. =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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