anka Posted December 13, 2004 Share Posted December 13, 2004 This is the second poem I wrote in my life. Please let me know what you think WE MADE IT GO…. We let it go…. It was so painful It felt like a dull knife Slowly cutting up my soul And blood all black from anger, frustration and disappointment Dripping from everywhere From eyes and heart and ceiling Coming down the walls And drowning me I cannot breath, I cannot scream And move Everything is scary and dark And there is no single ray of light Coming into the room Will it ever stop? Will I ever open my eyes again And see the sun? Will I ever move, or dance Or laugh, or walk, or talk, or breathe? We had sunshine within our souls We felt joy from every touch, From every kiss, from every word But we let it go… We were blind, and deaf We lied and sinned We were selfish and unkind We let it all be covered by the darkness of the world Without a fight, without a scratch Without a cut It's lost, it's gone, it's never coming back We changed, we grew Apart and older Now I can see the sun again And move and breathe and talk And even laugh But it's all not the same There were no rusty staples in my heart before And now they're there squeezing tight So tight so that old wounds are opened up from time to time It really hurts, And bleeds sometimes Just like the dirty, stepped on And with broken wings our love was bleeding When it was forced to go away We made it go… Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bilal72401 Posted December 13, 2004 Share Posted December 13, 2004 wow, that was an amazing Poem, really good! very well done! i like it alot, keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
anka Posted December 16, 2004 Author Share Posted December 16, 2004 Thank you, bilal Does anyone else have any opinions? Does it sound like a poem? I'm really inexperienced, any opinion is appreciated. thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
anka Posted December 16, 2004 Author Share Posted December 16, 2004 I wrote this to my ex b/f on our 2 year anniversary, I'm not sure if it's a poem, I think it is. Please let me know what you think... Thank G-d for our love... If you ever looked at someone and tears came up to your eyes just because you wanted to express all the love and happiness you felt when you saw this person, but were unable to; If you ever hugged someone and wished you could stay so close to each other forever, never let go, always feel this heartbeat next to yours, and hear both of you inhaling life in unison; If you ever thought about how impossible life would be if the life or the death separates two of you, won't let you enjoy the gentle touch of hands, the look of those sky blue eyes, the smile worth millions of finest diamonds, and just the thought made you miserable, made your heart feel the sharp pain, and your mind realize that you will not be able to survive, to move on; If you ever felt the world disappear and all its problems vanish in nowhere when you felt the soft touch of lips on your face; If you ever knew that the day you've met this someone was given to you as a precious gift from G-d, and no matter what happens you will always be thankful for that day; If you ever felt the same way about one special person, then it will be very easy to imagine how I feel about you, because this is exactly how I feel when I look at you, when I hug you, when I think of you, when I feel the touch of your soft lips on mine, when I thank G-d for our love... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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